Thursday, June 17, 2021

Close to the Sun

 Ahhhhhh Friday!

The first summer weekend has me thinking about the sun.

Thank you, Buffy Silverman, for hosting this week. If you haven't sampled Buffy's poems...hurry up! She's one of my favorites. And, she has lots more poets to visit too.


Generalic, Ivan. “Ivan Generalic.” Studio Generalic, Studio Generalic, 24 Nov. 2019, www.generalic.com/ivan-generalic/nggallery/artworks-by-ivan-generalic/artworks-1950es-by-ivan-generalic



Close to the Sun


Icarus soars
doesn’t he?
no wax melting
burning
into crisp
shining
moments--
flight!
defy father’s gravity

escaped boundaries

until


…Until

boundaries escaped
gravity, fathers defy
flight
moments shining
crisp into
burning

melting wax -- NO!
he doesn’t
soar –
Icarus!


(c) Linda Mitchell




Hamish really enjoys a bit of history--especially if it's of my hometown. Have a peek at his padlet. 
https://padlet.com/mitchellhubeimom/Ox 


Annnnnnnnnd...I'm hosting Poetry Friday next week with my sorta-kinda-yeah annual CLUNKER EXCHANGE! I'll give you lines of mine that just clunked in the last year to see if you can breathe life into any in exchange for a line from your poetry. Look for something fun! I LOVE getting the party started early so look for my post Thursday evening. 



17 comments:

  1. reverso + a bit of history from Hamish = double scoop treat, Linda. You and Hamish need to stay cool in the summer heat to bring us more treats.

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  2. Oh, my, Linda! What a spectacular example of a reverse poem that works. I've never had success at this, but now you are giving me a challenge. I was just out reading about them and read "The Lost Generation" by Jonathan Reed. That is a good one too. OK. I have my challenge, and I can bring a boatload of CLUNKERS. I'll try to find one for next week! :) THanks. I love the August poem from Hamish too. Sweet post this week.

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  3. Oh, a reverso! So clever! Thanks for sharing. Your plan for next week sounds great. I will be away at a writing retreat with my critique group, but I will try to sneak in!

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  4. Oh wow! This is amazing. What a challenging form and so well done!

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  5. I feel sad thinking about Icarus, when interpreted as dreams falling flat. What a clever use of this form. I know it wasn't easy. Nice work!

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  6. Your reverso holds bits of mystery, a connection to Father's Day in a different way makes a fine poem, Linda. I love the presentation you've created, too!

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  7. I love this! A reverso is so clever. I have never even tried one yet.

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  8. Nice job with a difficult form. Like the connection to Father's Day too!

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  9. The reverso form works so well in your poem! Poor Icarus--he doesn't soar!

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  10. Wow! Look at you ramping it up with a reverso! I love the story of Icarus, even though it doesn't turn out so well for him! :-)

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  11. I love how you sneaked in a reverso. It took me a minute. The father defying flight grabbed me. I am curious how the clunker excange works. Do we send you an email with a line?

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    1. Nope...just show up. You can drop a clunker into the comment section next week.

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  12. Touché with your reverso form, excellent Linda! I've always loved Icarus' tragic and bittersweet story, and
    "NO!
    he doesn’t
    soar"

    But you did grandly!

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  13. Terrific work, Linda! You picked a great topic and tough form.

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  14. I saw a New Yorker cartoon this week with the caption, "Well, actually, he flew too close to the ground." YOu can imagine the drawing. You DOUBLE reversed this baby! Instead of each whole line in reverse order, you also reversed the word order in each line. Now THAT's a twist. I like the Father's Day connection and the image of "wax melting into crisp shining moments."

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  15. From beginning to end and back again this is a terrific reverso, Linda! Looking forward to clunkering it with you next week! :)

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  16. Wow! Of course the story of Icarus works as a reverso, but it took your brilliance to think of it, Linda! I love your play on the word "gravity."

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