tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post2328747493012558510..comments2024-03-24T07:40:30.032-04:00Comments on A Word Edgewise: Box PoemsLinda Mitchellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00833034575304594924noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-4002212276586060072019-09-08T08:24:26.637-04:002019-09-08T08:24:26.637-04:00Linda, I was totally engrossed in your haibun with...Linda, I was totally engrossed in your haibun with its great blend of fiction and poetry. I agree with Michelle that a draft must be in the working. Still have to find the time to call you. Carol Varsalonahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589714711155938528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-89162483379551168842019-09-08T08:19:49.289-04:002019-09-08T08:19:49.289-04:00I love the haibun, Linda. You clearly have some re...I love the haibun, Linda. You clearly have some real skill at writing engaging prose, then the haiku at the end is like icing on the cake! I sure hope you've got a MG novel going in all your "spare time". Maybe it can even be a "haibun style" novel in verse...? Seriously, you should think about it if you haven't already, Linda.Michelle Heidenrich Barneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02051827857519159837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-75380288300314461472019-09-08T02:56:23.304-04:002019-09-08T02:56:23.304-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.jan godown anninohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00091996699597066230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-51269829543794626902019-09-08T02:53:51.719-04:002019-09-08T02:53:51.719-04:00I make a poor judge - awarding a box of intriguing...I make a poor judge - awarding a box of intriguing boxes to each of these creative gems.<br />You. Are. Outstanding! jan godown anninohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00091996699597066230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-58521263241748014952019-09-07T14:06:11.380-04:002019-09-07T14:06:11.380-04:00I like them both, but the box poem really stuck wi...I like them both, but the box poem really stuck with me! The idea of all the possibilities that a box holds makes me happy!Whispers from the Ridgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07819098985292406065noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-10388202298710005972019-09-07T13:31:08.039-04:002019-09-07T13:31:08.039-04:00Nope, can't choose which I like better - I lov...Nope, can't choose which I like better - I love both of them. I want to hear more of Justin's story. You had me hooked from the first line. And I love the possibilities in the poem. Maybe this is why I'm such a sucker for boxes and jars of all kinds. Kayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08210045352610490115noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-71329688623397205462019-09-07T07:15:25.981-04:002019-09-07T07:15:25.981-04:00Like many others, I love both of these, Linda. The...Like many others, I love both of these, Linda. There is sooo much potential in your haibun. I can't wait to see where that takes you! And yes, summer is too short. I also love the playfulness of your second poem, and the possibilities: what will this "hollow box-heart" hold? Well done! Catherine Flynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00390699128046569127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-38811223682213685022019-09-07T06:31:16.690-04:002019-09-07T06:31:16.690-04:00I always enjoy your haibuns, Linda! You create suc...I always enjoy your haibuns, Linda! You create such a rich field for the final haiku to play on. Your second poem is beautifully structured (the repetition of the first stanza for the ending is perfect!) and I love the phrase "hollow box-heart" and the optimism of all those possibilities. Molly Hoganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16975100905434379155noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-83921546079144243072019-09-06T22:10:46.388-04:002019-09-06T22:10:46.388-04:00Linda, thanks for being FIRST to join our Poetry F...Linda, thanks for being FIRST to join our Poetry Friday gathering! This is so lovely-- full of character and heart. And your fellow poets offer such beautiful feedback too!Sylvia Vardellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16970790447637356879noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-66836542709656434972019-09-06T20:35:53.004-04:002019-09-06T20:35:53.004-04:00I think they are both special poems with very diff...I think they are both special poems with very different rhythms and journeys. I like the spunkiness of your second poem and the story, that may beg for more in the first, thanks Linda!Michelle Koganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02575814872372518994noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-75930613875991482792019-09-06T18:48:52.128-04:002019-09-06T18:48:52.128-04:00E*ually I love them: the contrast of the fullness...E*ually I love them: the contrast of the fullness of the haibun's story and the haiku's pinpoint summary of the relationship, and the specifics of what might be in the story box. Glad the boxes inspired you so! (Also you win the prize for first poster this week!)Heidi Mordhorsthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16496427007514895950noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-74869635184571734642019-09-06T14:29:00.511-04:002019-09-06T14:29:00.511-04:00I agree that the haibun opens possibilities for mo...I agree that the haibun opens possibilities for more! It feels like the beginnings of a short story. The closing haiku holds so much and I love the wistful last line. In the Box Poem, I love "hollow box-heart!"Joyce Rayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02905709719444916488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-87744233185883334792019-09-06T12:16:59.335-04:002019-09-06T12:16:59.335-04:00I love both, too! From the first, I was especially...I love both, too! From the first, I was especially struck by:<br /> each box holds stories<br /> yours inside mine inside more<br /><br />and the second, by <br /> this box has <br />possibilities--<br /><br />and all the possibilities!Carmela Martinohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15543808551988338496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-22098707149602651522019-09-06T10:51:27.469-04:002019-09-06T10:51:27.469-04:00Enjoyed both poems, Linda. It's nice to see a ...Enjoyed both poems, Linda. It's nice to see a haibun -- a wonderful form that PF folks don't seem to share very often. And the idea of story boxes is so rich with possibilities. :)jamahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07859083373087448194noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-63632986945636173382019-09-06T10:16:57.390-04:002019-09-06T10:16:57.390-04:00I love the haibun, Linda. It feels like the beginn...I love the haibun, Linda. It feels like the beginning of a longer story. (And reminds me of a poet friend's version of Grandma Camp -- Camp Gigi.)author amokhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09800868615186010584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-26119004734120364902019-09-06T09:49:13.996-04:002019-09-06T09:49:13.996-04:00Both are wonderful, Linda! I love "each box h...Both are wonderful, Linda! I love "each box holds stories / yours inside mine inside more." Love the thought it provoked, that my stories are in my kids and grandkids... and theirs are in me.Alice Ninehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05302512837699702430noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-26986726657687393472019-09-06T09:18:49.075-04:002019-09-06T09:18:49.075-04:00I enjoyed them both. I did like Haibun more. The p...I enjoyed them both. I did like Haibun more. The poem is very good but I'm always a sucker for story and I feel like haibun sets up some interesting characters and family dynamics. Lots of potential there.Tim Kulphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16505477762863615353noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-61426046134778116062019-09-06T07:08:20.954-04:002019-09-06T07:08:20.954-04:00That's not a fair question. I love them both!...That's not a fair question. I love them both!Donna Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13738281869266957726noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-91104933047751225762019-09-06T07:02:30.593-04:002019-09-06T07:02:30.593-04:00I love both of these. Summer has been way too shor...I love both of these. Summer has been way too short, and the second reminds us in a loving way of the immense possibility each of us has. Thank you!Kimberly Hutmacherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17481478199892532599noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-1288476515665170632019-09-06T06:19:39.175-04:002019-09-06T06:19:39.175-04:00You know I love your skill at haibuns. This one i...You know I love your skill at haibuns. This one is dear to my heart as I foresee Gran camp in my future. Margaret Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04434866104385187658noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3682499942234804128.post-42520960482924898992019-09-05T23:53:10.373-04:002019-09-05T23:53:10.373-04:00I love the haibun, Linda, a start to a story to lo...I love the haibun, Linda, a start to a story to love, that growing up, or someone with a secret that will open up Justin's life he never imagined. But, I also love the ending of that second one, "a top<br />a bottom<br />with stories inside." What a fun challenge Catherine set!<br />Linda Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14983144542632353870noreply@blogger.com